General Crowdfunding Thread, Mark I

[Grinner]

Your proposal needs a lot of work. If you intend to be professional about the project, then you need to practice professionalism. The proposal is riddled with grammatical errors.

• missing apostrophes ("we're" instead of "were")
• unnecessary commas
• misuse of tenses

Also, the usage of the first person is rather distracting. Put most of the focus on the game, not your team.

Edit: Also, capitalization. For one, Imbue Games is a proper noun.